High Salaries of Sports Professionals vs Other Jobs

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no hesitation in saying that celebrities like are paid considerably those who are in important professions and engineers.

Generally, Sport starts, apart from excelling in their game, they also of people. This naturally gets the attention of the public and the media. So they become very popular. Commercial product manufacturers take advantage of this popularity and they use these famous personalities to promote their product by paying . A great example for this is Sachin Tendulkar, A famous cricketer in India, who is treated as god of cricket. He acted in many advertisement films supporting numerous . Most of his income is in the field. This proves that the celebrities earn more money by influencing society than doing their own job.

On the other hand, the main reason for the people in crucial professions are not paid as much is due to . These people normally stick to their own job and most importantly the outcomes of their jobs are not entertaining. Also, media . Even if a documentary on their achievements, people just watch and ignore it. A great example of this is Mr. Vishweswar, who of one of the major irrigation projects in India. In his project, the design of the reservoir is so amazing that it has of water for thousands of . Though his achievement of poverty in south India by reducing the cost of farming, he was not paid any extra money for this. This proves that, people can’t become wealthy by helping the society.

In conclusion, I strongly feel that the attitude of the people should change. They should identify the real heroes. Every individual should realize that the people who give benefits to the society should get paid more them.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both views with relevant, well-chosen examples and maintains a clear overall progression. Its main limitations are a conclusion that shifts toward what should happen rather than directly resolving the fairness question, plus recurring grammatical and word-choice errors such as 'sport starts' and 'has became'.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.0

Both views are addressed with relevant developed examples, but the response mainly explains why the pay gap exists and the opinion in the conclusion does not directly resolve whether high sports salaries are justified or unfair.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Ideas are arranged in clear paragraphs with a generally logical progression, though cohesion is somewhat mechanical and some links between ideas are loosely connected.

Lexical Resource

6.0

Vocabulary is adequate for the topic with some appropriate collocations, but there are noticeable slips and imprecise choices such as 'sport starts', 'ample amount of money', and 'mercenary brands'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, and article use, for example 'the main reason... are not paid', 'has became', and 'more that those', reduce accuracy.