Whilst some people believe that competition is beneficial, others cooperate more. This essay will argue that both approaches can be positive, but it depends on the situation. , competition can be in different situations. In the workplace, for example, people who compete with their co-workers might perform better, which results in a more productive company. In the sales industry, it is extremely common for this practice to occur, and the competitive element tend to make more sales and . In education, competition can be it prepares students for the , whilst also motivating them to . On the other hand, competition can be detrimental because it often encourages selfishness and . In the previous examples, the positives can also be outweighed by the negatives in some cases. A salesperson who is too competitive might annoy their co-workers, resulting in a . When only one person is successful and the others are demoralised, the overall sales might decline. Meanwhile, students at school may suffer from the pressure of a competitive environment and those who fail might lose the will to continue learning. As such, cooperation must also be encouraged. This allows people to balance the self-centred competitive approach with a more team-oriented one, offsetting some of the potential negatives. In conclusion, both competition and cooperation are important in various aspects of life. It would be best to emphasise the benefits of each and to encourage between them so that people .
Competition vs Cooperation in Daily Life
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, balanced argument with relevant examples from work and education, and its paragraphing and progression are consistently logical. The main limitation is the thin development of the cooperation side and occasional language slips that slightly reduce precision.
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Task Response
7.0Both views are addressed with a clear position that a balance depends on context, supported by relevant workplace and school examples, though the cooperation side is less developed.
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0Ideas progress logically through well-sequenced paragraphs with effective linking devices, with only minor mechanical cohesion in places.
Lexical Resource
7.0Vocabulary is flexible and mostly precise, using phrases like 'demoralised' and 'team-oriented', with an occasional slip such as 'can destructive attitudes'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0A good range of complex structures is used with generally strong control, with rare errors that do not impede understanding.