Competition vs Cooperation in Daily Life

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether regular brings about more , and which one should be encouraged. While some favour competition in schools and professional arenas, others advocate for cooperation. In this essay, we will discuss both viewpoints. Personally, however, I favour collaboration and teamwork rather than competition and rivalry.

On the one hand, competition in encourages students to study more attentively . Without and clear winners, most learners will not work hard. For instance, schools that rank students based on their performance, and offer prizes for top talents generally create a more competitive yet conducive study environment than their counterparts. The same goes for workplaces where most employees would not put in their best effort had there been no appraisal for promotion, competition and rewards.

, those who favour cooperation rather than their opinion that collaboration is a much more powerful tool than rivalry as it teaches valuable skills like learners and professionals together to achieve a common goal. study together and share their knowledge and help each other, they learn far more than those who never study in a group or share their notes and knowledge. The same problem can have multiple solutions and learners understand all of them and can find the best solution rather than keeping them hidden due to fierce competition. Similarly, employees in an office, for instance, achieve more and solve more complex problems when they work together.

In conclusion, cooperation is a much more powerful instrument than rivalry as the former brings more positive results and thus should be encouraged in workplaces and schools.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response fully addresses the task, discussing both views with a clear personal opinion in favour of cooperation, and its strongest aspect is the consistent, relevant development of both sides with concrete classroom and workplace support. The main limitation is slightly mechanical organisation and occasional awkward word choices that keep the language from being fully flexible and precise. Errors are minor and never obstruct meaning.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

Both perspectives are addressed and developed with relevant examples, and a clear personal position is stated early and reinforced in the conclusion, with only somewhat conventional argument depth.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

Ideas progress logically through clear paragraphing and linking devices, though some connectors such as 'on the contrary' are used mechanically rather than expressing precise logical relationships.

Lexical Resource

7.0

There is a sufficient range of topic-related vocabulary including 'conducive', 'appraisal' and 'fierce competition', with occasional awkward collocations like 'in academies' and 'brings about more positivity' that reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures, including conditionals and relative clauses, is used with generally good control, despite occasional minor errors in articles and phrasing that do not impede communication.