Capital Punishment and Controlling Violent Crime

Without capital punishment (the death penalty), our lives are less secure, and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With rising violence and ghost gun availability, normal people are more prone to danger now than ever. The whole judicial process consumes a lot of time and effort to punish the guilty. Furthermore, the lighter fail to the culprit from repeating the crime placing the public in danger. I partially agree that capital punishment is needed to control violence and will try to explain below. Many criminals repeat their offending behavioural pattern as soon as they come out of after serving the sentence as prison fails to bring any change in their basic nature. Plenty of criminals jailed in sexual cases and robbery continue such behaviour once they are out again. Many racists and terrorists with extreme nature also follow the similar kind of pursuit. Also ghost guns without serial numbers and attacks inspired from online videos it difficult to guard against vulnerable victims. offenders depending on the gravity of the situation as such people are too risky to be left out again. Nevertheless, to criminals cannot alone change their behaviour as observed in ISIS who are prepared to die in their own attacks. Thus, a solution that reduces the crimes and . Also, it assumes that perpetrators can never change rejecting the basic notion behind the punishment and legal process. Death is too severe and cannot be reversed in terms of penalty. Thus, capital punishment fails to address the cause of concern in reducing the crime rate but it is imperative of extremely grave crimes. Just like how one shoe doesn't fit every foot, one punishment cannot address all the in the society alone. It surely does apply to few scenarios and some other measures are to be taken to address the elephant in the room.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response presents a clear, nuanced partial-agreement position and develops it with relevant reasoning and examples on both sides, showing a strong awareness of the task. Its main limitation is language control: recurring spelling and grammatical slips and occasional imprecise phrasing, along with some mechanical cohesion, hold the writing below its strongest content.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The response addresses the task directly with a clear partial-agreement position, developed arguments, and relevant supporting examples, though some ideas, such as the deterrence logic, could be more precisely reasoned.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5

Ideas are organised into a logical stance–support–counter–conclusion structure with usable paragraphing, but some referencing and transitions are loose or mechanical, and the conclusion is slightly muddled.

Lexical Resource

6.5

Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes apt for the topic, with occasional flexibility, but recurring spelling errors and imprecise word choices reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of simple and complex structures is evident, but frequent grammatical errors in agreement, articles, and verb forms, though mostly non-impeding, limit the band.