In Recent years, If we see some crimes. even death penality is not sufficient to punish the criminals of those crimes like Nirbhaya case in India, Terrorist attack on Taj hotel in India and famous attack on world trade towers. As i already mentioned inherited death will be there in all living creatures in this universe. We can of death to prevent crime in society by in by hanging the criminal in the crime like nirbhaya case in India. the question, How far it is correct to kill a person punishment, then is "yes it is correct" Because we have to see the intention behind killing the person. A soldier killing an enemy is not at all a crime but a person who was killed other person for the sake of money is deffinetly a crime. Similarly killing a person who was killed other person is to prevent the crime and the victim. Capital punishment is not a new concept to us, It is there from our ancient times. So i can conclude my argument as capital punishment is essential to in society along with efforts to the and way of thinking of criminals .There should be the capital punishment,other wise it may cause in society violence in society.
Capital Punishment and Controlling Violent Crime
Without capital punishment (the death penalty), our lives are less secure, and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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Overall assessment
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents a clear position in favour of capital punishment and supports it with relevant examples such as the Nirbhaya case and terrorist attacks. However, the argument is underdeveloped, the opening paragraph is confusing and loosely connected, and frequent spelling and grammar errors reduce the overall polish, with the response also falling slightly short of the length requirement.
IELTS criteria
How each score was decided
Task Response
5.5The writer addresses the question with a clear position supporting capital punishment and offers relevant examples, but the ideas are only partially developed, the opening is tangential, and the response falls slightly under the minimum length.
Coherence and Cohesion
5.0There is an attempt at logical progression, but cohesion is mechanical and the first paragraph jumps between loosely connected points, making the progression uneven and at times hard to follow.
Lexical Resource
5.5Vocabulary is adequate for the argument with some topical terms such as justice, intention, and ideology, but it is limited in range, repetitive, and marred by misspellings like penality, deffinetly, controle, and idiology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
5.0The writer uses a mix of simple and complex structures, but frequent errors in sentence construction, articles, agreement, and clause control recur throughout and sometimes strain communication.