Capital Punishment and Controlling Violent Crime

Without capital punishment (the death penalty), our lives are less secure, and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Punishment in any form, when it is given to the offenders, must bring modification in behaviour. the absence of the death sentence, human beings’ lives are at risk, and it can escalate brutality. So, it is considered that execution is indispensable in order to in society. I completely agree with the statement because maintain law and order in society. Moreover, rebuilding the faith of people in a government makes it necessary to execute criminals.

, if criminals do not get punished for their crimes, then people feel insecure. Because they think offenders can harm them as well. So, it is essential to control the activities of the and deter violence in society. In this way, law and order can be maintained. Criminals will think twice before committing any activity. people would have a secure life. So, for the smooth running of governmental activities, it is indispensable to give the death penalty to criminals. However, it must be given the severity of the crime. For instance, many minor girls were raped and murdered. Thus, innocent children lose their lives without any fault, and those who survive confront psychological trauma. So, here in such cases, a is mandatory.

people have lost their faith They consider that the government is doing nothing and on bail. So, to rebuild the trust of the masses, it is compulsory to punish criminals. Many times, it has been shown that people do not get justice even after so many years. They believe that means justice denied. So, it is a must for to get the trust of individuals; otherwise, people would have no other alternative but to migrate overseas for their safety. So, it is a stigma on the fair name of any country. Consequently, any government will lose its reputation.

To conclude, Thus capital punishment is essential to maintain law and order and deter people from committing criminal activities. lead a secure life. Moreover, individuals would trust their government, and they will be ready to contribute to the betterment of their nation.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a clear, consistent position with two relevant supporting ideas and examples, which is its strongest aspect. The main limitation is mechanical and often faulty cohesion, with heavy reliance on 'so' and several sentence fragments, alongside occasional word-choice errors that reduce precision.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

6.5

The position is stated clearly and maintained throughout, with relevant main ideas on deterrence and public trust, though development is uneven and the rape example is generalised rather than fully elaborated.

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0

Progression is broadly clear, but cohesion depends heavily on repeated 'so' and some misused or mechanical linking, with occasional fragments weakening paragraph flow.

Lexical Resource

6.0

There is an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary such as deter, culprits, and law and order, but noticeable word-choice errors like 'abdominal activity' and awkward collocations reduce precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0

A mix of structures is attempted, but frequent sentence fragments, comma splices, and agreement errors limit control and occasionally impede clarity.