Inborn Talent vs Taught Skills in Sports and Music

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is commonly believed that some individuals are inherently gifted in areas such as sports or music, while others lack such innate talents. Nonetheless, there is an assertion that every child can be instructed to excel as a sportsperson or musician. I believe that the latter view is more rational. The forthcoming essay shall discuss both aspects and explain why I believe in the latter.

, individuals who exhibit a remarkable capacity for learning and adaptation are often regarded as naturally gifted. This is because they can enhance their skills with minimal external guidance, and, in some instances, they can achieve a high level of proficiency without formal instruction. For example, the American singer-songwriter Bob Dylan and Indian singer Kishore Kumar serve as prime examples of natural talent, as they developed their singing skills without any professional training.

On the other hand, proponents argue that any child can be to become a skilled athlete or musician. They assert that consistent practice can foster proficiency and confidence in a person’s aptitude. Moreover, the influence of a skilled teacher can transform any child into a . For instance, the current star of Indian cricket, Virat Kohli, on the cricket world at the West Delhi Cricket Academy. This serves as a compelling demonstration that, with effective guidance and skill development, a child can excel in their chosen profession.

To conclude, there is no denying that a for sports, creates great artists and sportspeople. However, as mentioned above, I believe that with perseverance and practice, one can create place in the world.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses both views clearly, states a consistent position, and supports it with relevant real-world examples such as Bob Dylan and Virat Kohli. The main limitation is somewhat thin development of each idea, with explanations that remain general rather than fully elaborated. Language is fluent overall, with good range and only minor inaccuracies.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Response

7.0

Both views are discussed with a clear personal position and relevant supporting examples, though ideas are developed adequately rather than fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

The essay progresses logically through clear paragraphing and appropriate cohesive devices, with only occasionally mechanical linking.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary shows good range and flexibility, including less common items like innate, nurtured, and proficiency, with minor imprecision such as hardcore practice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

A variety of complex structures are used with good control, and errors are minor and do not impede understanding.