Letter to Manager Before Starting Work Experience

You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter: Thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience Explain what you hope to learn from the work experience Ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

Annotated response

8 correction notes

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to thank you for offering me the opportunity to undertake a work experience placement at your company. I am excited about the prospect of gaining practical insights into the day-to-day operations of a leading in this field.

During my time with you, I hope to develop a better understanding of how businesses in this sector function. I am particularly interested in learning about your marketing strategies, customer service approaches, and the challenges you face in remaining competitive. Observing experienced professionals in their roles will allow me to valuable skills that I can apply in my future career.

I would be grateful if you could provide some details about the specific tasks I may be assigned during the work experience. Will I have a chance to meetings or assist with any projects? Are there particular departments you would recommend I based on my interests in marketing and business operations?

Thank you once again for this invaluable learning opportunity. I look forward to making a positive contribution during my placement.

Randal Bizol

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The letter is strong: it fully addresses the purpose with a consistently appropriate formal register, covering thanks, learning goals, and several relevant questions with well-developed detail. Its main limitation is slightly generic content that could be made more specific to the placement, and vocabulary that is competent but occasionally formulaic.

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

8.0

The letter achieves its communicative purpose with all three bullets covered and developed, using an appropriately formal and courteous tone throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0

Ideas are organised logically across clear paragraphs, with a range of cohesive devices used naturally to sequence thanks, goals, and questions.

Lexical Resource

7.5

Vocabulary is flexible and precise for the context, though some phrasing leans on conventional formulae rather than highly natural or sophisticated collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

8.0

A wide range of sentence structures is used with accuracy and flexibility, including well-managed conditional and relative forms, with only rare minor lapses.