Letter to Book a Weekend at a Seaside Hotel

You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. Write a letter to the hotel for making the arrangement. In your letter say, when you will be arriving and leaving what type of rooms you would like and ask how much the weekend will cost inquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel

Annotated response

10 correction notes

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to for a weekend stay at your seaside hotel with my family. We are planning to arrive on Friday, 28th April , and will be leaving on Sunday, 30th April .

We two double rooms with a sea view, if available. Could you please the total cost for the weekend, including any taxes or additional charges?

I would like to the . Are there any family-friendly excursions, water sports, or local attractions that you would recommend during our stay?

Thank you in advance for your I look forward to your reply our booking.

Yours faithfully,

IELTS criteria

How each score was decided

Task Achievement

7.0

The letter addresses all three prompt points—arrival and departure dates, room type and cost enquiry, and nearby activities—with a consistently appropriate formal tone, though it falls 23 words short of the minimum and each point is only briefly developed.

Next step
Expand each bullet with additional relevant detail, such as reasons for the sea-view request or more specific questions, to exceed 150 words without losing focus.

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0

The letter is logically organised into paragraphs matching the bullet points, with clear sequencing and effective cohesive devices such as 'Additionally' and 'Could you please'.

Next step
Add slightly more linking between ideas, for example connecting the booking request to the cost enquiry, to strengthen progression within paragraphs.

Lexical Resource

7.0

Vocabulary is precise and natural for a formal enquiry, including items like 'family-friendly excursions', 'water sports', and 'additional charges', with good collocational control.

Next step
Incorporate a wider range of topic-specific phrasing, such as expressions for availability or seasonal activities, to further demonstrate lexical flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0

Grammatical range is solid, mixing declaratives, indirect questions, and conditionals ('if available') with reliable accuracy and only minimal punctuation slips around the dates.

Next step
Refine spacing around dates and vary sentence openings more to add polish while maintaining the current grammatical control.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter's strongest aspect is its clear, purposeful structure with all three bullet points covered in a suitably formal register. The main limitation is the short response, which leaves some bullet points thinly developed and triggers an under-length penalty. Prioritise expanding each point with more specific detail to meet the word minimum.